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His house is made of crumbling slats
    of rotted knotted oak
  peeling paint
and weakened joints.

  The wind blows unfettered
through unshuttered apertures
   dragging fresh sunlight in
      and memories away.

Even on the clearest days
       he visits the front porch
    less and less often.

        He prefers to explore
    those rooms further in
where tide and time have yet to reach.         Sometimes
                                     he might be gone for a week.

And one day, too soon
    (not soon enough)
  his ramshackle dwelling will collapse
      tumbling six feet down
          abandoned at last.
There is no house. It's all a metaphor.
And a damned depressing one, at that.

Written for #fotoFRIDAY; inspired by Jerome Ruin by !markramstead. (A black and white close-up of a small wooden cabin or shed on the verge of collapse.)

Update, as of June 15: What a wonderful surprise; thank you to ~literatureODD for the feature.
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Given 2012-05-07
Alzheimer's by `BornBlitzed ( Featured by thorns )
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is an absolutely depressing insight, and I love it. It gives me a better knowledge of how one of my great-aunts must have felt as she lay in the nursing home day after day, not knowing who she was or who any of us were. Thank you for giving me a better understanding.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Professional Writer
It's my honor, believe me. As I've mentioned elsewhere in the comments, the fear of someday succumbing to dementia is one of my biggest phobias; Flowers For Algernon is a horror novel.
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't blame you one bit. I've watched too many people have their memories and lives taken away, and it scares me to death. I'm young, but I still fear it.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Professional Writer
:cling: And rightly so, if you've had firsthand experience with it. I'm banking on the fact that there's no history of this (as far as I'm aware) in my own family; and secondarily on any potential medical advances over the next two or three decades.
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VShaw Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012
I've read this four times now. I just love it. I mean, don't get me wrong; it's depressing as hell, but the entire poem has so much depth. So much beauty. The imagery just blows me away, but also creates this deep-seated sadness. It seeps into my gut. And the structure is phenomenal - I appreciate that there's so much to get visually without soaking up the words.

There is so many damn layers.

Powerful stuff indeed, sir. A fantastic piece of art.

... And now I'm going to have to read it again! :)


V.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Professional Writer
:thanks: This is one of the most beautiful and uplifting accolades it has ever been my pleasure to receive. Thank you so much for sharing your honest feelings with me.
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VShaw Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
You're very welcome.

Honestly, I got a lot out of reading this piece, and I'm typically not a fan of poetry. Thanks for sharing it. :)
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electricelephant Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
I have to tell you, I just reread this again for the second time, and I still cannot even begin to express how much this touches me genuinely. You did a fantastic job, and you should be extremely proud of what you have accomplished with your words. Through one poem you have expressed a deeper element of pain, longing, sorrow and desperation that all accompany this unfortunate disease, and I applaude you. Well done.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Professional Writer
:blushes: What a wonderful thing to say; thank you so much.
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electricelephant Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
You are very welcome :)
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deathshadow3 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
this is so sad... not even this face (--> TT^TT) can describe how sad it is....
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Professional Writer
I'm glad it touched you, then. :thanks:
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Beautiful...Very nice metaphor. ;)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Professional Writer
:thanks: Thank you.
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cembree Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Congrats on the DD! :salute:

This poem is such a touching one. It's subtle, but the references are also easily understood.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
:hug: As always, thank you.
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kaymarie24 Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Student Photographer
That is beautiful. Such a powerful piece. Reminds me of my Gran. I didn't see her at all in the 3 years before she died because it just wasn't the same when she didn't remember me, and it was worse to see her not remember my Dad. I like to focus on all the good memories though, because even if she didn't have them any more, I did :) Congrats on the poem, it really is beautiful.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you so much; and you have my sympathies on your loss. Kudos to you for choosing to remember the happy times, rather than dwelling on the sad.
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:bow: congratulations!
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
:) Thank you.
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome. i enjoyed reading it. :bow:
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infamously-dorky Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Student General Artist
I'm fighting tears right now. I can't help but think of my grandpa. He doesn't remember me anymore. :( This piece is beautiful.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
I'm sorry for your grandpa. I hope these words have helped, in some small way.
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infamously-dorky Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Indeed they have. In a way, it reminds me of the days when he did remember me. I was never old enough to truly know him personally.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Professional Writer
:huggle:
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infamously-dorky Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Student General Artist
:'3 :hug:
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avi17 Featured By Owner May 7, 2012
Beautiful writing. :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
:thanks: Thank you.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am in awe of this piece. The metaphor was amazing the first time I read it, but upon reaching the end, making the connection, and having my "aha!" moment (without reading the description which would have saved me time... however some of the best discoveries are those you may yourself, and I enjoy pondering over the written word) it was a thousand times better when read the second time. Especially when you take the time to let this lovely imagery in, and to watch it as a movie. Even the structure seemed to be like the unstable house, falling down in your last stanza! I seriously thought some of it even reminded me of creaking floor-boards, and with imagery and just lovely talent this strong, I felt compelled to comment. Thank you so much for sharing, and you have a way with words, truly. I will say this piece was depressing... but so beautiful that it seems you cannot feel sad long enough before you're once again drawn back in to ponder certain lines and/or images received from this. Just fantastic job!

Congrats on the DD, too! :party:! It is most deserved!
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
It's comments like this which inspire me the most. Thank you, from the bottom of my heart. :heart:
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HugQueen Featured By Owner May 7, 2012   Writer
:heart:
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
:tighthug:
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HugQueen Featured By Owner May 10, 2012   Writer
:hug:
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moonlitjester Featured By Owner May 7, 2012
Wow. I'm just totally in awe right now. Beautiful poem. Congrats on the DD, it was definitely well-deserved.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
:blushes: Thank you so much.
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MNCrowgirl Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Professional General Artist
So well written... yet your words hit such a raw emotional chord in me.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
:thanks: I'm glad this made you feel that way; thank you for sharing it with me.
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Question: Do people with Alzheimer's have "Free Will"?
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
As long as any of us do, why would they not? Limitations on choice doesn't mean having no choices at all.
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:handshake: Excellent Answer! I threw that out there 'cuz so many Religious types like to play the "Free Will" card as to why there is so much "Evil" in this world.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Evil is a question of motivation. There's no motivation for dementia; it just happens, at least until we learn enough to cure or prevent it.
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pearwood Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes, it's my mom, one of the most intelligent people I've ever known and one of my very best friends. Too soon but not soon enough.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
I'm sorry to hear of your loss; I hope that my words have provided some small comfort.
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pearwood Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes, thanks.
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winterkate Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Student Writer
This is damned depressing, yes, but very good as well. Too soon, not soon enough. I love it.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you; and also for taking a moment to say so.
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winterkate Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. Wow, I never thought you would answer me back :) thanks so much!
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Professional Writer
My pleasure; it's how I was raised. :)
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winterkate Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! That is so lovely of you. :) My compliments to whoever raised you.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Professional Writer
:)
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