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I thought I saw each day flow by,
from final rest to birthing cry:
the total sum of deeds undone
are bleached beneath the blazing sun
and offered up to passers-by.

The crows will claw, the seagulls cry,
the terns will carry tidbits high,
the pterodactyls catch and run—
 I thought I saw.

But vivisect or vivify,
the price will never be as high
as back when I had purchased one
brand-new, and clearly underdone;
to Zeus in gratitude, I'll testify:
 "I thought I saw."
apotheosis n. 1) The act of deification. 2) The high point or climax. 3) The epitome or best example.

Originally inspired by a timed prompt in the #CRLiterature chatroom; reworked into something a bit larger in scope.

:bulletpurple: Yes, this is a rondeau. The extra foot in the penultimate line is deliberate: it's a modified alexandrine, and its inclusion has been my small contribution to the form.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm loving the rhythm in this. Gorgeous work! :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Professional Writer
8-) Thank you; this was fun to write.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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Quelythe Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Poems like this make me wish I knew more about fixed form. I loved the rhythm, and the sense of going in reverse.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
:nod: It's said the best creativity is found in constraint, in the same way that a snowflake requires a mote of dust around which to form. Thank you.
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Quelythe Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the analogy. Although I have to say that free verse can also have some dazzling displays of creativity -- although perhaps it forms around another type of dust mote. :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Professional Writer
More than likely. It's the restriction that's important; not which specific kind.
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cembree Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's such a pretty poem.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Professional Writer
:thanks: I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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felineicecream Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
I love this poem. :) It just... Flows really smoothly. I'm not always a big poetry fan, but this has such a nice rhythm.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Then one of my goals is to convert you to a big poetry fan, one piece at a time. ;p
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felineicecream Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Student Writer
I feel so special.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Professional Writer
:giggle:
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Mystery-of-Brenna Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Student Writer
It reminds me more of T.S. Eliot than it does of Shelley. Or Aeschillus. Don't know whether that was intended or just came with the form?
Absolutely great poem.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Well, the form itself is French; but I suppose the subject matter does kind of invoke The Waste Land. And of course, the title and subject are an homage to Aeschylus' Prometheus Bound.
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cality Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful poem! It all flows beautifully. :aww:
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Professional Writer
:D I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Cassildra Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I re-learned a word today. I always forget what apotheosis means.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Professional Writer
:superman: My work here is done. Be well, citizen. *flies off*
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