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I thought I saw each day flow by,
from final rest to birthing cry:
the total sum of deeds undone
are bleached beneath the blazing sun
and offered up to passers-by.

The crows will claw, the seagulls cry,
the terns will carry tidbits high,
the pterodactyls catch and run—
    I thought I saw.

But vivisect or vivify,
the price will never be as high
as back when I had purchased one
brand-new, and clearly underdone;
to Zeus in gratitude, I'll testify:
    "I thought I saw."
a·poth·e·o·sis n. 1) The act of deification. 2) The high point or climax. 3) The epitome or best example.

Originally inspired by a timed prompt in the #CRLiterature chatroom; reworked into something a bit larger in scope.

:bulletpurple: Yes, this is a rondeau. The extra foot in the penultimate line is deliberate: it's a modified alexandrine, and its inclusion has been my small contribution to the form.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm loving the rhythm in this. Gorgeous work! :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Professional Writer
8-) Thank you; this was fun to write.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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Quelythe Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Poems like this make me wish I knew more about fixed form. I loved the rhythm, and the sense of going in reverse.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Professional Writer
:nod: It's said the best creativity is found in constraint, in the same way that a snowflake requires a mote of dust around which to form. Thank you.
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Quelythe Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the analogy. Although I have to say that free verse can also have some dazzling displays of creativity -- although perhaps it forms around another type of dust mote. :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Professional Writer
More than likely. It's the restriction that's important; not which specific kind.
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cembree Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's such a pretty poem.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Professional Writer
:thanks: I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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felineicecream Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
I love this poem. :) It just... Flows really smoothly. I'm not always a big poetry fan, but this has such a nice rhythm.
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