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Curled in my pocket, pink and full of promise: Schrödinger's kitten.
I broke down yesterday, what with the Mega Millions multi-state lottery jackpot exceeding the gross domestic product of several of the world's smaller countries, and actually purchased a couple of chances at the brass ring.

:doh: But I forgot to call up the winning numbers before closing down the lottery terminal, so I brought the ticket home: well aware that the system already knew whether I had a winner, even though I still didn't. That state of affairs put me in mind of Herr Doktor Schrödinger's famous gedankenspiel — and the rest is history, or at least the above senryū.

Unfortunately, it appears I will not be retiring to my own private micronation anytime soon. C'est fou le hasard.

N.B. The original title ("Pet Theory") was discarded as being more cutesy than clever. The new title is the transliteration of the Japanese word for 'lottery ticket', chûsenken. I hope you'll agree that its literalness makes for a better fit.
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
I feel that the explanation is too much, in a way, and that the poem (even as short as it is) should carry the weight of its meaning.

Sorry about the island nation, though. Bummer.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2010  Professional Writer
Fair enough.

And I'm with you on that bummer; now what am I supposed to do with all that paperwork, not to mention the barrage of lawyers?
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msklystron Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Nice metaphor!:)

Your well-crafted short work made me smile.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2010  Professional Writer
Um, heh. A (very!) belated thank you. :blush:
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msklystron Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Better late than never.:D
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Purple-Fearie Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2009   General Artist
short an' sweet.

much like this comment XD
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009  Professional Writer
:thanks: And this reply.
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Purple-Fearie Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009   General Artist
should've expected that one ^^;
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mreid973 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2009
I like the futility that manifests after the break (for all that kireji are not traditional to senryu, although I suppose it isn't quite a clear cut). And thanks for including such a fitting explanation in your comments.
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank you; the well-defined kireji is one of the reasons I chose to present this as a one-line senryū in the first place.

And I've actually thought about whether the presence of even a metaphorical 'kitten' counted as a kigo. (I evoked that particular piece of imagery for its size, color and flexibility, which makes sense if you've seen the mottled pink paper the tickets are printed on.)
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mreid973 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
Makes sense.

The kitten is a strong image: a potentially poisoned kitten. And it isn't like senryu need kigo, so it doesn't matter if the kitten counts or not.

Maybe it actually is and isn't a kigo. Only when I read it, it isn't.
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parentheses Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2009
Saw you'd posted and thought, "Oh good! Hope it's short, I don't feel like reading anything long." ... that's a bit shorter than I was thinking, though. :lol:

Marvellous image, made me smile. I like this a lot. :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009  Professional Writer
:hug: I hope you like it as much, or more, with the updated title. And thank you for appreciating it enough to fave it so quickly.
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parentheses Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
It came at just the right time, and taught me a bit more about poetry. ;) And you know, I thought the original title was very clever. But arguably this one suits it more. :nod:
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