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Like so many before me, during the twilight of my years my belly has expanded dramatically, even as I've lost so much of that which once gave me structure and strength. My frail skin has turned a fierce and blotchy red, with innumerable breakouts and occasional massive flareups. I'm no longer the bright light of the party which not so long ago I used to be, nor do my most intimate lifelong companions find me to be anywhere near as scorchingly hot as I was in my prime. Several of them, in fact, have already abandoned me.

With advanced age, even basic control over the simplest of bodily functions has been compromised. Lately, for example, I've begun uncontrollably passing gas: rather copious amounts, I'm afraid. And my coughing jags, once intermittent, have become deeper and far more frequent; in fact, a given spasm can last for hours or even days, to the point where I'm left hacking up nothing but fumes.

Nor, unfortunately, is there any known cure for my affliction. I'm on oxygen right now, and have been for some time; but eventually, inevitably, even that will no longer be enough.

Everything in the universe enjoys a finite lifespan, and my own is quickly drawing to a close. I've accepted this basic fact; there's neither point nor purpose in raging against the dying of the light. An excess of iron has been accumulating within my aging core; the condition is always fatal, and there exists no safe recourse for transplanting or bleeding any of it away.

But those who have been following my case have given me reason to expect that the actual moment of my demise, when it comes, shall be like an immense beacon echoing across the void. My time-worn heart, overwhelmed, will at last implode; I'll give a single violent shudder and finally collapse, my dying breath blasting through this mortal coil to release my blazing soul into the Great Beyond.

What remains will be a shrunken and desiccated corpse, hemorrhaging what's left of its bodily warmth upon a sparse and frozen wasteland, with only the distant company of my oldest children for companionship during the unending night. A cold comfort, indeed; enough to leave me spinning in my grave, perhaps for all eternity.

However, at least I can take solace that from the throes of my death, others nearby may find fresh inspiration and purpose: new life, both in their creation and through their eventual evolution. Like the outstretched hand from which I've taken my name, I shall seed the universe with my progeny, my very essence; and as a Simurgh among swans, be immortalized forever thereby.

And what is my name, you ask?

Betelgeuse.
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:D Gotcha! At least, I hope I did.

My entry into `OfOneSoul's inaugural literature contest, Sing Me a Swan Song, which is running through March 1st.

:nerd: As many of you know, every so often I like to let loose my inner nerd, as well as write from an unusual anthropomorphic perspective. I've done it with programming languages, radioactive chemical elements, Christmas decorations, clinically depressed backyards, politically-motivated cheese, and even lecherous clothing. :la:

:#1: Now to that list, add one of the brightest objects in the night sky: the red supergiant Betelgeuse, voted "Most Likely To Go Supernova Within The Next Millennium" by a near-unanimous vote of the rest of its graduating class.

A supernova in a sense is the ultimate swan song: in a single glorious and terrifying outburst, that dying sun will produce more energy than from the entire rest of its lifespan; in fact, it'll briefly outdo the whole Milky Way galaxy! To those fortunate enough to witness it, Betelgeuse will outshine Venus (possibly even the Moon!) and may even be visible during the daytime for months, perhaps well over a year.

:drool: For the science geeks in the audience, there's plenty of astronomical nerdplay for you to salivate over; every one of the symptoms and actions attributed above is an actual step in the supernova formation process and its aftermath.

The title comes from Dylan Thomas' opening stanza:

Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.


The star's name is derived from a Latin corruption of the Persian Yad al-Jauzā, "Hand of Orion". And in Persian mythology the Simurgh is the queen phoenix, considered by some to perhaps be older than the universe itself.

For those willing to critique this: I've gone comma-happy, using 'and' far more often than I usually do, not to mention an excess of '-ly' adverbs. I was trying for the voice of a world-weary oldster who still has a defiant spark burning within; did it work, or does it come across as a distracting affectation? Did you believe the narrator was a person until the big reveal, or was there any awkward phrasing that may have tipped you off early? Thank you in advance. :thanks:

:reading: ~WordCount: 450 words.
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~Mystery-of-Brenna Mar 14, 2013  Student Writer
I did discover the anthropomorphism in the poem rather quickly, but I'm entirely unsure whether there was something intrinsic in the poem or in you ;-)
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Mood: Peaceful `HaveTales-WillTell Mar 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Have you uncovered my secrets? Or are you calling me *gasp* predictable? :omfg:

:D Ah, well. Guess you can't win 'em all.
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~Mystery-of-Brenna Mar 28, 2013  Student Writer
Hehehe, no, not predictable. But let's say you have a certain style to you. Like Rushdie or Coleridge or whoever you like best ;-)
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`HaveTales-WillTell Mar 28, 2013  Professional Writer
I've been shooting for the bastard child of Ernest Hemingway, Piers Anthony and Shel Silverstein. An unholy alliance if ever there was one. :devil:
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~Idontknowwhoyouknow Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A very good story!
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`HaveTales-WillTell Mar 3, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
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`cality Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You got me! :lol:

A very clever and nicely written piece. :D
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Mood: Thanks `HaveTales-WillTell Mar 3, 2013  Professional Writer
:#1: YES! . . . I mean, good. :la:
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I really love the title. Thank you for sharing, it's a great read. :)
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`HaveTales-WillTell Feb 19, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm glad you thought so; thank you for taking the extra moment to say so. 8-)
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